View From Room Five

In my class we had to write about what we can see out from one of our windows. The window that I chose was the one on my left. We had to write an introduction about what we are going to be writing about, then we had to write paragraphs for each object that we saw. Our success criteria was to use present tense, use show don't tell, use adverbs of place, short introduction and conclusion, variety of precise vivid adjectives, verbs and nouns, use a variety of conjunctions to link ideas and organise writing into paragraphs. Here is my writing about what I saw from the window that I chose.

The View from Room 5 

Outside room five windows there are lots of wonderful sites to gaze at. I don’t think a lot of other schools have such wonderful views like Awahono School has, everywhere you look you see interesting.

Just outside my window there is a dark brown sandbox that has dry light brown sand in it. The sand is covered by a red piece of cloth and it is there because they are keeping the sand all dry. The cloth is holded there by shiny tall poles that are in the shape of a cylinder. The sandbox is surrounded by lots of  short green grass.

There are sheep that have fluffy coats that are as white as milk. They also have lots of green grass to eat and they are in the second paddock next to Mrs Elam's house. 

Far away is Mrs Elam’s house which has a light green roof also a whitey yellow coloured bottom.Also Mrs Elam’s house is covered by lots of skinny trees with very light pink leaves on them. Her house is at the back end of the school field that has small little bits of green grass.

From my window I can see some fat, grey and rocky mountains that is at the end of the field and they are mostly covered by clouds that are bumpy and as white as milk. In the distance all rocky grey mountains look like it is on a lean because it doesn’t look like it is very straight compared to top of the smaller mountains.